Comments on Chick With A Quill: Infernal Stalking

SzélsőFa, I'm so glad you liked this! I too miss y...

2009-10-21T19:56:32.927-03:00

SzélsőFa, I'm so glad you liked this! I too miss your visits, and also your poetry and your fiction. But don't worry, we're all busy with things... and most of them are just... blah...
:-)

Wow, now I read it through. Detto what Myladysa sa...

2009-10-20T18:03:59.665-03:00

Wow, now I read it through.
Detto what Myladysa said -
Or to put it in another way: I keept creeping to the edge of my seat. Literally I almost fell off at the very end.
Great poetic piece.

I've been absent - but will be back soon. I liked ...

2009-10-20T17:59:23.511-03:00

I've been absent - but will be back soon. I liked your Equinox poem and will return for everything in between.
It's only that I'm busy with things.
Mostly, blah.
And some, you know what.
:S
but that will pass, too.
I missed your writing.

Karen, thank you for such a detailed and considera...

2009-10-19T12:52:51.884-03:00

Karen, thank you for such a detailed and considerate comment. The fantastic literature (not fantasy) and the science-fiction are what I like most so that’s what I write.
When I wrote this, I "was" on that street, feeling, seeing, hearing everything – that’s how I am when I write something…
The book, ah, Karen, now you shamed me and it’s a very good thing. The book is somewhere on one of those shelves I was mentioning not so long ago. I suffer greatly of an amazing lack of time.
But I thank you with all my heart for your encouragement.
xoxoxo

Mark, I’m glad you saw this. An unseen adversary is often scarier and more menacing.

Jason, “delicious” – that’s a wonderful word! Thank you! I’m thrilled that you liked this.

Thank you , Bernard!

Aine, thank you! “Warped coziness” – I like that!
The photo is weird, isn’t it? Could be the landscape of nightmares… I’ll have to dig more to find out from which film it is.

Geraldine, thank you so much! :-)

Michelle, I’m very glad you liked this. ‘Tis the season to be scared… :-)

Nevine, yes, I thought that a first person POV would make this piece more “real”, closer to the reader… Thank you for your kind praise.

Fireblossom, ahem… *large grin* …thank you! :-)

Gel, thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed this. :-)

Laughingwolf , I’m thrilled that you liked this! :-)

A good sign, indeed, Miladysa. :-) Thank you so much!

Marilyn, I’m almost sorry that you read this , after I just read on your blog how you feel about such disturbing stories… But thank you for reading and for your kind words! :-)

Akasha, thank you! I love, the Darkside… :-)

Rick, what interesting things you’re saying! “Free-versing in mental prep for a novel to see how it played “ – never thought of that. How interesting! Some of my shorter pieces are like this. Ideas with not enough “meat” to make it into a short story but perfect for a vignette. Unfortunately, I think this is all there is to this piece…
I do feel more creative and prolific in October. Maybe because of Halloween and because of my love for all things dark and fantastic.
I was born in April and, you are right, I feel a sort of special energy then… But maybe everybody feels it, because of the renewal in nature.
Thank you very much, Rick!

Tabitha, I am glad that you found my blog! :-) Thank you for reading this and for your very nice comment.

Kaye, yes, where can we turn to if our home even is not safe?...
Your words of praise bring a smile and a shiver to my heart. Thank you, my friend!:-)
xoxoxo

OOOoooo! When our dark imaginations have moved i...

2009-10-18T21:30:19.614-03:00

OOOoooo! When our dark imaginations have moved into our cellars, and have manifested themselves, as who knows what...where in the hell CAN we go?

From the very first line you capture my attention - "...The night is wings of crows..." so gracefully expressive and infinitely poetic. You build the tension so masterfully - and then, you softly drop that last line producing that wanted shiver that all writers hope they elicit.

Dark and delicious. So well written. and I love th...

2009-10-18T19:11:55.200-03:00

Dark and delicious. So well written. and I love the ending. The darkness... wow. I'll never walk home alone again. Glad I found your blog.

Hi Vesper. This has such a different rhythm than ...

2009-10-18T16:03:59.770-03:00

Hi Vesper. This has such a different rhythm than most of the work that you've displayed that the more I read it, the more I wondered if you were free-versing in mental prep for a novel to see how it played. I'm doing a lot of that now so I thought I'd ask if you were doing the same. Especially when you comined the element of opera. Here's what I'm saying: I'm dying to hear more about the background and future of this piece.

Also, do you feel more creative and prolific in October? I do, and I was wondering if you do, too. I wonder if we're more creative in the month's we were born? Or at season's change.

Oops. I almost forgot to tell you I loved the piece!

Oooooh! Vesper! I love it. You've crept into the D...

2009-10-18T15:19:58.964-03:00

Oooooh! Vesper! I love it. You've crept into the Darkside. :o

You create such an intense, atmospheric journey in...

2009-10-18T15:17:22.990-03:00

You create such an intense, atmospheric journey in merely this walk with the narrator...my heart is pounding faster now, having just read it :).
Thanks, Vesper!

I was reading faster and faster as this went along...

2009-10-17T13:08:56.703-03:00

I was reading faster and faster as this went along - always a good sign lol

My favourite lines:

"The night is wings of crows, flapping silently over my shoulders. A thousand whispers of leaves, or mice, scurrying at my heels."

Bravo!

oooooooo i like the mood/visions... especially the...

2009-10-17T11:27:51.191-03:00

oooooooo i like the mood/visions... especially the 'milk monster' at the end ;)

Hi Vesper, Suspense grips me like a vice as I hol...

2009-10-16T22:50:14.483-03:00

Hi Vesper,

Suspense grips me like a vice as I hold my breath reading. Your style of questions, and succinct short sentences interspersed among longer background description, adds to the momentum. Well-done.
-gel This is my new writing & photography blog address

Vesper! You scared me half to death, girl! ;-)

2009-10-16T22:10:57.568-03:00

Vesper! You scared me half to death, girl! ;-)

This is beautiful, Vesper. Very often writing a su...

2009-10-16T19:46:05.456-03:00

This is beautiful, Vesper. Very often writing a suspenseful piece is akin to challenging reality. Here, because the focus is on what you're feeling, how you're reacting to the stimuli around you, it flows beautifully and is entirely real. I really enjoyed this!

Nevine

you built the suspense so well. i was engaged from...

2009-10-16T17:53:11.360-03:00

you built the suspense so well. i was engaged from beginning to end. i think this is the perfect seasonal piece. have a great weekend.

Just excellent Vesper. You've built in the suspens...

2009-10-16T13:37:11.093-03:00

Just excellent Vesper. You've built in the suspense and tension so well. I was holding my breath byt the end...

The operatic build of the terror within... a sort ...

2009-10-16T13:04:13.599-03:00

The operatic build of the terror within... a sort of warped coziness. Very nice!

And that photo! Just fantastic...evoked some fantasy for me, that's for sure!

A very well done chiller!

2009-10-16T10:16:04.686-03:00

A very well done chiller!

For me, this is one of the most delicious things I...

2009-10-16T09:05:50.405-03:00

For me, this is one of the most delicious things I've read on your blog. Really a masterpiece of heady sensation, mood, fear, and consignment. Bravo!!

It is much more haunting because no creature came ...

2009-10-16T07:58:54.476-03:00

It is much more haunting because no creature came out of the night. Much more viral because the darkness within and without is the monster.

How easily you write this genre. Reading this is l...

2009-10-16T06:33:10.315-03:00

How easily you write this genre. Reading this is like entering your mind and feelings. The details you include - such as the newspapers blowing like tumbleweeds, the winds rising as you pass by breaks in the buildings, and the sound of the shoes slapping on pavement - add to to the realism and also heighten the tension.

You do the tension part really well. Beginning with the night, adding in the wind, the deserted street and the music leads to a higher and higher level of anxiety as the narrator vainly seeks escape from the inevitable.

I hope you're continuing work on your book, Vesper. You are entirely readable and engaging. Great seasonal piece, but beyond that - very, very good!