Comments on Chick With A Quill: It Came From... - a fragment

Great start Vesper. I am drawn in. And I am glad...

2009-05-03T06:04:00.000-03:00

Great start Vesper. I am drawn in. And I am glad that you have found a story to work on that is grabbing you so hard that it distracts you from blogging. THAT is a GREAT thing, so don't worry about apologizing.

Same here...Will eagerly wait for your book:)

2009-04-30T14:47:00.000-03:00

Same here...Will eagerly wait for your book:)

Thank you, Miladysa! I’m very glad you liked it! :...

2009-04-30T08:58:00.000-03:00

Thank you, Miladysa! I’m very glad you liked it! :-)

Kaye, I thank you dearly for your praise. I’m smiling from ear to ear… :-) Yes, I have the whole story. The details make it truer to me and, hopefully, to any reader too. I always feel I need to do a lot of research, sometimes even for a vignette.

Thank you, Vanilla, I’m so pleased that you liked it! The opening paragraph seems a bit heavy… I have to think about it. :-)

Oh, Rick, a great thank you to you for your encouragement. :-)

Thank you very much, Greener Bangalore, and welcome to my blog! :-)

Geraldine, thank you so much! :-)
*many hugs*

Deepazartz, thank you for your very kind comments! Welcome to my blog – it’s very nice meeting you! The book, oh, that has to be written first… :-)

Lovely tone..the voice..I was travelling along wit...

2009-04-29T16:17:00.000-03:00

Lovely tone..the voice..I was travelling along with the protogonist. Very compelling read. Would like to read the rest.

Came here via Aniket's blog..courtesy today's post:)
Even I believed his word & visited everyone mentioned in his post. Quite thrilling to've 'met' you all.

Wish you all the luck for your yet-to-be-published book:)
Cheers!

PS:Will wait for your book.

I agree with the comments above. This made me want...

2009-04-28T13:20:00.000-03:00

I agree with the comments above. This made me want to read more, find out what happened next. What an intriguing story idea Vesper...keep working on this, very original.

Hugs, G

Very nice write-up Vesper....

2009-04-28T01:12:00.000-03:00

Very nice write-up Vesper....

No comments for you, Vesper. Get back to work so ...

2009-04-24T21:48:00.000-03:00

No comments for you, Vesper. Get back to work so there's more of this to read. :)

Great storytelling Vesper! Very atmospheric and i...

2009-04-24T12:43:00.000-03:00

Great storytelling Vesper! Very atmospheric and intriguing. A few small things niggled, but I suspect you'll pick those up in the edit. The one thing that gave me most concern though was the length of your opening sentence. Perhaps that's something you might look at on the next draft.
But great stuff and I look forward to reading more!

Love the voice of this piece, Vesper! What an arr...

2009-04-23T22:13:00.000-03:00

Love the voice of this piece, Vesper! What an arresting tale you have conjured.

You have spun a beginning so rich in detail and description, which makes me believe that you have a clear vision of where you are going with this. It's a gripping story, to be sure. I am definitely along for the ride!!

Compelling and very atmospheric! LOVED it :D

2009-04-23T17:08:00.000-03:00

Compelling and very atmospheric!

LOVED it :D

Ello, thank you so much for your kind words and fo...

2009-04-23T08:53:00.000-03:00

Ello, thank you so much for your kind words and for taking the time to write such a detailed comment. I’m very touched. I think you’re right about that sentence. :-)

L.A., I’m so glad you liked this! You’re saying it in such wonderful words. Thank you so much! :-)

Ah, LW, but my heart is dancing… Thank you! :-)

Karen, it is indeed a great compliment and I thank you for it and for the encouragement. :-)

Oh, Lisa, what can I say… I am humbled and impressed that you like this one and that my other story stayed with you. Thank you! :-)

Mark, let us see, indeed… Thanks for reading, my friend. :-)

Thank you, Bernard! The “ands”, yes, I know of this problem; I’ll chase them out! :-)

Thank you so much, Aniket! :-)

Marilyn, I’m glad you find this beginning compelling. Thank you kindly for your support. :-)

Vesper, I'm delighted to see you off and running o...

2009-04-22T17:11:00.000-03:00

Vesper, I'm delighted to see you off and running on something like this--so intriguing! You've brought us into a compelling place... Please keep at it :).

Delightful read Vesper! We want more... :-)

2009-04-22T14:18:00.000-03:00

Delightful read Vesper!
We want more... :-)

A very enjoyable tight segment, Vesper. I would on...

2009-04-22T13:21:00.000-03:00

A very enjoyable tight segment, Vesper. I would only ask you to take another look at all your 'ands'.

Ahhh I am finding shades of Jonathan Harker as he ...

2009-04-22T05:03:00.000-03:00

Ahhh I am finding shades of Jonathan Harker as he begins his journey. Yes let us see where this journey takes us and find the solution to the "green hand of the Devil."

You are an enchanting story teller. From the very ...

2009-04-21T23:41:00.000-03:00

You are an enchanting story teller. From the very first you draw the reader in and you've left us all wanting more. I remember another story you wrote in installments last year (maybe even the year before) with a girl finding a mirror in an attic. I'm haunted by that one still.

This story is very compelling, and I want to know ...

2009-04-21T18:35:00.000-03:00

This story is very compelling, and I want to know more. That is, at least in my mind, a great compliment. When I begin to read a story or a novel, I'm either hooked or I'm not within the short space of a few paragraphs. This one has me. No critique. I wouldn't! You will do what needs done as you revise. Meanwhile, write on!

the ladies beat me to it, v... keep doing what you...

2009-04-21T13:53:00.000-03:00

the ladies beat me to it, v... keep doing what you're doing, it rocks! :)

A brave soul you are to put up a first draft :) I...

2009-04-21T12:35:00.000-03:00

A brave soul you are to put up a first draft :) I adored your voice so much, I do not want to comment for fear it will dilute it. Love the supernatural tease here. Neglect the blogs, Vesper, and write on. What a gem this is.

Love this! You have me aching to read more! And th...

2009-04-21T12:23:00.000-03:00

Love this! You have me aching to read more! And the feel and tone of it is so rich and just absolutely absorbing!!!!

Ok here were just a few things I picked up but feel free to ignore.

The sentence "It almost feels as if he’d rather left it out if not for his deep compulsion for rigour and truthfulness." read awkward for me. It might just be missing a 'have' between rather and left.

When he meets the bookshop owner again. one paragraph starts "how i grew" which I thought was a little jolting til I realized it must have been what the owner says.

And I didn't notice anything else other than that I would really love to read more! I love the language you use here too. Perfect for the tone.